Thursday, 12 June 2014

Josie


Once there was a little village called motor filed there  were  sweet , polite  tiny people . One day giant person came and almost there  destroyed home there were so afraid they dag a  hole into the ground until he was gone .He went and they  found a big cream egg, it was crack open. The  builders went to an see what happened they went and licked it they said it  tasted delicious they said to the tiny people ‘come and taste it,’ every one it taste delicious so they went to taste it they said its fanatic.

1 comment:

  1. Well done Josie. You have included excellent descriptions with super word choices and are beginning to use speech punctuation. Next time try to read your work aloud to check the grammar. I agree...cream eggs are delicious!
    Louise Team 100WC

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