Betrayal
One cold dark black night I was with my friend Kyle. We are in prison and
were both 18. We were in jail because my friend Kyle betrayed me. We were
running from the cops on the gateway to Brisbane. We were running because we
robbed a bank. The cops were gaining on us. Just then Kyle pushed me over to
jump on to the ropes supporting the bridge. While I was still on the ground in
pain the cops were cuffing me up. While I was in jail Kyle was on the bridge
but then he was caught by the air police.
Well done Flynn. A very dramatic and sad story. You have some super descriptions and explanations. Next time try to open your sentences with something other than 'we'.
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